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**Our first thoughts... ** **What is socialising???** People getting together and meeting and talking... Mingling with other people...  Blogging...   **When or how might you socialise???**  Making friends...  e-mailing  Meeting new people  Meetings  Talking in groups  Social networking sites  Chilling with others...  Playing together or hanging out with friends  Discussions - sharing ideas  Ringing people  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Txting  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Parties  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Celebrations e.g. weddings, birthdays, Christmas, Rugby World Cup Final  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Schools/Workplaces <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">**What is the purpose of socialising???** <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Meeting new people  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Spending time with friends/families  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Find out more about what's going on  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Share ideas  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Have fun  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Celebrate  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Learn/Teach  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Comfort and be there for others  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Share in/share with other people's happiness/lives <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">**How do we socialise in writing???** <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Sharing information  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Blogging  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Send letters  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Send e-mails  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Invitations  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Sharing pictures  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Notifying people about events  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Wikispaces - share and collaborate - information, learning, ideas  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Txting invites or just to catch-up  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Interviews  <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;">Social networking sites: twitter - sharing what you're doing & finding out about others; facebook - sharing holiday photos/photos from events, posting messages, posting happy birthday notes, writing on walls, chat, inviting others to things

**<span style="color: #ff7300; font-family: 'Lucida Console',Monaco,monospace; font-size: 170%;"> About WALT socialise... ** <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Writing to socialise helps writers to maintain or enhance relationships with others. Can be formal or informal. Forms include: apologies, thank you notes, invitations, announcements, greetings, letters, notes and messages.

1. Orientation: //Establishes the purpose, and may include time and place. May include a greeting.// 2. Body: //Contains the message or information details to be shared.// 3. Prompt: //A call to action that involves instructions about what to do such as RSVP. If there is no prompt there may be a formal farewell such as Yours sincerely…//
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Information in them & structure for WALT socialise: **

//**<span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 150%;">Audience... **// //**<span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; line-height: 27px;">Content... **// //**<span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; line-height: 27px;">Structure... **// //**<span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; line-height: 27px;">Language Features... **//
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Targets the specific audience (to the specific participant e.g Mrs Smith, Nana).
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Maintains audience interest using humour, anecdotes and careful choice of language
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Shares your personal voice e.g. humour, conversational tone, your own stories as examples.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Maintains a point of view or focuses clearly on a specific event, idea or opinion.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Structured with an orientation, body, & prompt.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Paragraphs with one main idea and specific detail such as comments, observations, opinions, examples.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Range of sentence starters and lengths.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Make logical links in and between the paragraphs.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Uses first and second person pronouns e.g. I, me, you, your.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Has questions e.g. are you happy in your job? What do you think about…?
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Concise language (not too wordy or repeats ideas).
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Simple past tense (future for invitations)
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">Action verbs.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 140%;">May include abbreviations e.g. gr8.

We had to use our writing matrix and where we are at to help us choose one or two good learning goals from our success criteria to focus on developing in our writing. Here is the link to our learning goals. media type="custom" key="11094566" align="center"

<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Console',Monaco,monospace;">Our first efforts (Week 2): WALT socialise <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Console',Monaco,monospace;">1 November 2011 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Console',Monaco,monospace;">AG DAY: 5 NOVEMBER 2011 ** Hi Mum and Dad,

This is your reminder about what I'm getting organised for this weekend.


 * __Clay Bowl__**


 * __Cake Decorating__**

2 November 2011

<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**__WALT socialise__** <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**Form: Invitation - Where, When, What - Who**

<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**Purpose: Invite your parents to one specific event for Ag Day**

<span style="color: #ff7300; font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif; font-size: 180%;">**8 November 2011: WALT socialise** <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**Form - Thank you letters.** <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**Focus: Use appropriate structure and use concise language; write for a specific audience...**

//**Draft...**//

8 November 2011

Dear Ag Day Judges,

I want to thank you so much for all your efforts in the Whakarongo School Agricultural Day judging. I really appreciate how much time is involved - especially when you have to be here before nine on a Saturday!!! I know that judging children's work is a difficult task as most all make a huge effort and you wish that they could all do well so I imagine that it would have been a difficult task deciding on the placings using the success criteria for each craft or activity. I thought you judged fairly and considered all the criteria carefully and this showed in your feedback for the children.

I'm sure it would have been a neat experience for you also: judging the wide range of crafts from bowls to models to cakes to photographs and, especially, the lambs, calves and caged animals where some people had worked very hard to train them.

It was fantastic that you could spare your time to help the school out and I know that the children appreciate your efforts as well. I hope you found time to relax and enjoy the day also and I look forward to seeing you again at next year's Ag Day judging.

Yours sincerely, Ana Matangi-Hulls


 * Making it more concise: Into a thank you card...**